Question If I Had A Hammer Discussion

Part One is up. Part Two needs a read-through for things spell-check doesn't catch.

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Malady wrote: The jump from "After the Trip" to "Before the Trip" threw me for a bit, until I started paying attention to dates.

Maybe use section markers? *shrugs*

The Early August segment was supposed to be a dream/vision. That's why I indented it entirely, but with the scene shift that could be jarring.

Malady wrote: Still a great story, got a timeline anywhere? Although I think I am reading in publishing order.

Part One of "If I Had A Hammer" runs concurrently with "Chewing Through The Straps" stopping right before All Hallows Eve and the on-campus part of "Pictures of You".

Malady wrote: Not done rereading, but this isn't Elve, speaking at the end, right? 'Cause she isn't in the room?

"We went over the new gear yesterday, including the institutionalized paranoiac measures. Nice try but you'll have to do better going forward."

Rorsmand felt entirely justified in calling up Elve afterward to verify that she knew what the Insane Duo had asked her roommate to work with.

Once the distraught boy finally paused for breath – and surely there were better outlets for that kind of breath control? – Elve asked, "Are you referring to the chosen power supply in place of mains power?"

Yep. Elve's doing this rare thing called "studying" Kris is still a bit torqued off at Frick and Frack, so he stomped off and called her.

Malady wrote:

One night while watching Abelyn at work, in her element, Kristian Holm came to the beginnings of a conclusion that maybe it wasn't a trick of the lighting that made her as beautiful as she was.

Awwww! *heart*

Abbie isn't "conventionally pretty", but everyone should be seen as themselves in their home environment once in a while.

Malady wrote:

isn't the fire meant to stay inside the forge?

Nice opening header thing!

Thanks! The fire doesn't stay there, but that's half the fun.

Gotta sleep, but have this:

Nice integration of canon characters into your story, making appearances and stuff!

Malady wrote: Still a great story, got a timeline anywhere? Although I think I am reading in publishing order.

Does this help?

Date	Story	Event
10,950 BCE	--	Asteroid impact in Greenland. Beginning of the Younger Dryas Clovis culture collapses Impactor recorded at Gobekli Tepe Last remnants of Hyperborea buried
7000 BCE	--	Rhine, Thames, Meuse drain into estuary to become the English Channel
6225–6170 BCE	CTTS	The Giants Dance / An earthquake triggers the Storegga Slides
912 CE	CTTS	Near Djúra-bý. Narfi Halfdan murdered by Vali Wulfhereson
915 CE	CTTS	Norþworþig, Candlemas. Death passes Ælfred Wealhsone by
Feast of All Souls, 951 CE	CTTS	Deoraby. Vali Wulfhereson dies
Autumn, 1241	CTTS	Snorri Sturluson dies and is received in Hel, dines with Narfi and Vali
1992	CTTS	Hanna Declan born
April 1, 1993	POY	Rorsmand born
Oct. 19, 1993/2059	CTTS	Mathias Møller / Mads born (It's complicated)
1995	POY	Lars born
Summer, 2003	Canon	A series of murders near Springfield, IL includes one of Ayla Goodkind's cousins.
August, 2003	CTTS	An Anglo-Danish family, the Møllers, disappears.
2004/2074	POY	Mama Bear is one of the survivors of a hostile extraction with prejudice. Dr. Evelyn Beaulieu becomes Mads Gunnison's primary physician.
2005/2075	POY	Evelyn granted custody of Lars Gunnison.
Spring 2006	POY	Declan family biletted at Fort Bragg, NC
Spring 2007	POY, other	Rorsmand manifests
July 2077/2007	CTTS	Maj. Mads Gunnison warned about an upcoming/continuing threat.
July 31, 2077/2007	CTTS	Gunnison transferred to England, a courier drop is on the itinerary.
August 01	CTTS	Dunwich, NH: Deputy Sheriff Wednesday rushes a teen to Doyle Trauma Center. Afghanistan: Thomas Hrafn Jensen, CPL, CDF, age 25 MIA/KIA
Friday, August 10	CTTS	Chewing Through The Straps begins. Thomas H. Jensen bunking in Twain.
Thursday, August 16	CTTS	Mads Jensen transferred to Hawthorne Cottage for ongoing outpatient care.
Sunday, August 19	CTTS	Mads visits Dillon Chapel, refuses to enter.
Monday, August 20	CTTS	Mads' first UV check-in
Tuesday, August 21	CTTS	Mads begins training with Security to knock out some easy courses.
--	IIHAH	Abbie's parents meet with Mrs. Carson
Monday, August 27	CTTS	Early AM bug-hunt. Delarose and Carson are not amused.
--	IIHAH	Abbie runs into Mads at Dr. Tenent's office
August 28	CTTS	Decision to take "Underwater Basket-Weaving" in place of BMA.
August 29	IIHAH	Abbie meets new roommate, Elve Järvinen, from Helsinki.
--	--	Rorsmand bumps into Mads. Good thing they were already at Doyle.
September 1	Canon	First Assembly and Picnic.
--	CTTS	Mads meets Ayla on trip to Dunwich to get clothing fitted
Tuesday, September 4	CTTS	First Day of Classes! 1st period: Abbie is stuck next to a pyro. 3rd period: Metro volunteers to MST translate American History. 4th period: The foreign guy sitting next to Abbie in English is kind of cute. 6th period: Some mats in the Dojo catch fire, one student sent to Doyle.
Wednesday, September 5	CTTS	Bloodwolf and the Exploding Skunk. Mads volunteers himself to debrief a Dos Amigas road trip
Thursday, September 6	CTTS	Spy Kidz bug Metro's room. Metro discusses this with Sir Wallace
Friday September 7	IIHAH	Elve's Powers Testing. Abbie and Tira go over American History MST
Sunday, September 9	IIHAH	Abbie dreams about her parents' death
Monday, September 10	IIHAH	Abbie sees Dr. Bellows
Tuesday, September 11	CTTS	Metro's bunking in Doyle
Wednesday, September 12	CTTS	Spy Kidz way-lay Metro. It doesn't go well.
--	IIHAH	First Light in the blacksmith's shop.
Saturday, Sept 15	CTTS	Metro helps a witch out of a tree, almost breaks knee
Monday, September 17	IIHAH	Metro on crutches
Tuesday, Sept 18	CTTS	Bluejay gets what's coming to him
--	IIHAH	Smithy and Mads talk knives
September 19	CTTS	Metro takes on job for Sir Wallace
Thursday, September 20	Canon	Assembly of the Shrines
--	CTTS	Spy Kidz get a challenge assignment to demonstrate their professionalism
--	IIHAH	Abbie asks Kristian to study w/ her and Elve at 7 in Library
September 21	CTTS	Vamp takes on counter-surveillance job for Sir Wallace
September 22	CTTS	Metro wards Nikki and Tony's room, argues with Valravn, and breaks up an incident with Centurion & Switchblade, rescue Interface posing as Hardwyrd
September 24	CTTS	Metro's back in Powers Testing; Circe conducts the magical testing herself, Phase present for the experience; Metro's doppelganger Mathias Møller is tentatively located in Springfield, IL; Permission to investigate granted; Siofra and Metro check in on Donna Fields
September 25	CTTS	Mads has one of his bad nights
September 27	CTTS	Agustin 'Telluride' Garcia Rodriguez recruited for Springfield trip; Metro reviews his plans with Bardue and Carson
Friday, September 28	IIHAH	Mads tries to pay Abbie the remainder for the ordered metalwork, Admits he might not come back from the weekend trip.
September 29	CTTS	Mad, Thomas, and Gus go to Springfield
September 30	CTTS	Springfield, IL: Metro and company find something. Metro's now on the run. Thomas sees Gus to the local airport, then tries to follow Mads.
??	CTTS	Helvegr: Mads confronts his pursuer in the waters of River Gjöll. Returns to the Iron Wood, Jotunheim
October 1	CTTS	Security brings a Mythos-traumatized Telluride back from Boston
--	IIHAH	Rorsmand already not coping.
October 3	IIHAH	Abbie researches what she's being asked to work with
Thursday, October 4	CTTS	Metro's been missing too long, Rorsmand's ready to blow a gasket
Friday, October 5	CTTS	Fenrir Lokisson has a talk with his paternal uncle in a Dunwich diner; Bigby Woolfe visits Whateley Academy to pick up Mads' and Thomas' homework and see who's been nosing around his pack. Rorsmand not impressed by person nosing around his. Bloodwolf gets pasted in Arena 77.
Saturday, October 6	CTTS	Homework! Meet the Wolf Clan
Wednesday, October 10th	CTTS	Frick and Frack manage to return to campus during tail end of a storm. Multiple debriefings.
Thursday morning, October 11th	CTTS	Back in Class!
Friday, October 12th	CTTS	Vamp's and Metro's critiques of the Spy Kids' performance delivered to Sir Wallace.
Sunday, October 14	IIHAH	Mads hits a ward.
October 15	CTTS	Evening sim run w/Vindicators
Tuesday, October 16	IIHAH	Safety briefing, jerks!
Thursday, October 18	CTTS	Mads returns Tink to Whitman
Friday, October 19	IIHAH	Work really starts on Valravn's athame. It is way cool.
Thursday, October 25	IIHAH	Thomas consecrates his blade.
Friday, October 26	POY	Families converge for Parents Day
--	IIHAH	Valravn is dragged to sick call.
October 27, 2007, Parent's Day	POY	Mads has a productive morning. Agent Mikkel Andersen? Not so much. Surprises all around.
October 29	IIHAH	Prof. Choudhari sees a woman about a knife. Abbie confronts Mads about his plans.
All Hallows Eve, October 31	Canon	--
All Souls Day, Friday, November 2	POY	Cousin Brigitte visits with Janine Richter, BTFO's Rev. Englund.
--	IIHAH	Cousin Brigitte and Smithy discuss life, death, blacksmithing
Saturday, November 3	POY	Evelyn and Lars depart for home
Sunday, November 11	Canon	Veterans Day (US), Remembrance Day (Canada, UK)
--	IIHAH	Mads' pig-sticker gets finished all right. Abbie meets Inaam.
November 12	Canon	Remembrance Day, observed (Canada)
--	IIHAH	Abbie and Thomas talk
November 19	IIHAH	Mads pops the question.
Turkey Day, November 22	IIHAH	Thomas can skate, hockey happens.
November 27	IIHAH	Metro books some training time in Arena 91. Doesn't tell the others he invited some guests.
November 28	IIHAH	Rorsmand takes training way too seriously
December 3	IIHAH	Smithy vs. Centurion and Switchblade
December 4	IIHAH	Vapaat Taivas vs. Superchick.
Friday, December 7	IIHAH	AM: Rormand v. Ticonderoga and Abbie saw the whole thing
Saturday, December 8	IIHAH	Rorsmand's father arrives
Sunday, December 9	IIHAH	Abbie goes to church. Mads has a broken jaw.
Thursday, December 13	IIHAH	End of Term Ball.
Friday, December 14	IIHAH	Abbie sees the guys off from Whateley

CTTS: Chewing Through The Straps
POY: Pictures of You
IIHAH: If I Had A Hammer

"Earlier in the Fall 2007 Term, 6th Period Magical Theory Class,
Kirby Hall, Whateley Academy

Unfortunately for her peace of mind, Ophelia 'Caduceus' Tenent, MD, was once again called out from class for a medical emergency as a result of 6th Period Basic Martial Arts. This wasn't to say that the Class of 2011 was unusually rambunctious or accident-prone, compared to the Kimba Class of 2010,"


This part doesn't make any since. Is it year 2007 like it's stating in the opening. Or 2011 like in the paragraph.

NJM1564 wrote: "Earlier in the Fall 2007 Term, 6th Period Magical Theory Class,
Kirby Hall, Whateley Academy

Unfortunately for her peace of mind, Ophelia 'Caduceus' Tenent, MD, was once again called out from class for a medical emergency as a result of 6th Period Basic Martial Arts. This wasn't to say that the Class of 2011 was unusually rambunctious or accident-prone, compared to the Kimba Class of 2010,"

This part doesn't make any since. Is it year 2007 like it's stating in the opening. Or 2011 like in the paragraph.

Whateley's a four-year school. It's Fall 2007, so the incoming freshman are in the (graduating) Class of 2011, just as all of TK started as freshmen the previous year and will graduate in June 2010.

Class of XXXX refers to the expected year of graduation, whether it's High School or College.

Caught up to December , more or less.